“Mystery of the Moon”

Tarnished moon,

Cottoned in dark, settled clouds

Striated against still- wintry branches–

A ghostly beggar’s light spills

Upon a fallow ground.


This pale spring orb,

Cast on a placid lake,

Mirrors mysteries of countless years

Reflects an empty alone-ness,

Yet pulls at womens courses

And opens the womb to need.


Jane Kohut-Bartels

Copyrighted, 2010

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6 Responses to ““Mystery of the Moon””

  1. Berowne Says:

    I like the imagery, but I have a little trouble parsing the first stanza. Is the moon cottoned in the dark, with settled clouds striated against branches, or is the moon cottoned in the dark clouds? Inquiring minds want to know!


  2. ladynyo Says:

    The second….think in layers from the moon.

    And thanks for reading, even if it was a bit of trouble….


  3. Berowne Says:

    Oh no trouble reading – quite enjoyable – just in comprehending. I wonder; if you removed the comma between ‘dark’ and ‘settled’, that might resolve the ambiguity without munging the syllable count.


  4. ladynyo Says:

    did….does it make any real difference?

    but! perhaps you are right! I will never let a poem stand in the way of truth and progress!

    Lady Nyo


  5. R.K.Singh Says:

    I liked the second poem very much.


  6. ladynyo Says:

    Hi R.K.!

    I didn’t realize they could read as separate poems! They were just two stanzas to me of one…LOL!

    I think I see what Berowne was saying about this word usage: striated. The branches are striated against the moon…not the moon against the branches….hah!

    Well, thank you for reading and commenting on the poem, R.K.

    We understand that you have a very important work coming out soon: your Collected Works, neh?



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