‘Musings On The Close Of Day’, posted for d’versepoets.com

 

Musings On The Close Of Day

I move my chair

to observe Mt. Fuji-

monstrous  perfection

topped with the cooling crust

of spring snows.

Languid movement

of a branch,

like a geisha

unfurling her arm

from a gray kimono,

makes petals fall,

a scented, pink snow

covering my upturned face

with careless kisses.

Timid winds caress

my limbs,

a fleeting relief

to tired bones

brittle now with

a sullen defeat of life.

Raked sand of garden

waves barely disturbed

by feet like two gray stones

as grains  flow

round ankles.

I realize once again

I am no obstacle to

the sands of time.

My heart goes quiet

by the passage of nothing

for in this nothing

is revealed the fullness of life.

Jane Kohut-Bartels,

copyrighted, 2011

from A Seasoning of Lust, published by Lulu.com, 2009

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44 Responses to “‘Musings On The Close Of Day’, posted for d’versepoets.com”

  1. Daydreamertoo Says:

    Sad, whistful and lovely gentle imagery, all here.

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  2. Mama Zen Says:

    This is breathtaking!

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  3. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Mama Zen….

    I posted it early because I am exhibiting some signs of aging..can’t remember the day of the week!

    Thank you for reading and your comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  4. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Daydreamertoo….

    It goes with aging I think.

    Thank you for reading and your lovely comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  5. Pat Hatt Says:

    Wow amazing capture of the image. You really brought it to life that much more. That is a great pic too!

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  6. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Pat.

    Lady Nyo

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  7. brian Says:

    in this nothing is the fullness of life…nice zen close there…love the beautiful nature touches…serene…i dunno to me this is final peace…

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  8. Steve E Says:

    Lady, Howdy!
    Nothing is an obstacle to the marching, passage of time, because the program TIME has already been installed. The only Power Source has willed it to seem so to us. My Opinion…

    Again and again, I must say that you write so very well, woman. It is a pleasure to read your work. Thank you for sharing ir here.

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  9. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Steve!

    I am trying to believe in that Power Source….but it’s a struggle. Time marching on seems more…real.

    Thanks again, Steve. I am learning to stay in my zone about poetry…otherwise, it seems strained, false, you know the rest.

    I think there are enough dimensions in poetry to go around and others take up so much better, truer….other forms of it.

    Lady Nyo

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  10. Heaven Says:

    Soothing and calming verses.. a pleasure to read ~

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  11. Claudia Says:

    in this nothing is revealed the fullness of life….wow…i could drink this line again and again…are you really having such a view from your chair…even if you have to move it… this is gorgeous…but maybe the moving of the chair is metaphor..this is a multi-layered piece for sure

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  12. ladynyo Says:

    Hi Brian,

    I dunno…I think perhaps I have had too much death in the face lately, and it affects my poetry.

    so it goes…as does life.

    I wouldn’t mind this poem etched on my tombstone. LOL!

    Thank you, Brian for reading and your lovely comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  13. ladynyo Says:

    Hi Claudia…

    I wrote this poem, but I don’t understand it. Yet. I think you are right about the layers…perhaps we have to grow into them?

    Nah…moving the chair was just moving the chair…..LOL! A way to open the poem. And who ever knows what happens next? Unless there is a driving ‘thing’ in a poem? I just await them….and then don’t usually understand them.

    Thank you, dear friend, for reading and your lovely, insightful comment. Makes me think.

    Lady Nyo

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  14. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Heaven.

    This one calms me, too.

    Thank you for reading and your response. That generally makes the poems for me.

    Lady Nyo

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  15. jenneandrews Says:

    Meditative and beautiful– I wonder if you saw Rilke’s poem on Mt Fuji at A Year with Rilke blog… exquisite imagery– love the kimono/blossoms…xxxj http://parolavivace.blogspot.com .

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  16. ladynyo Says:

    Hi Jenne,
    No, I haven’t but I’ll look for it.

    Mt. Fuji inspires a lot of poetry around the world. It’s a holy place, as is Mt. Gassan in northwest Japan.

    Thank you for reading and your comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  17. Gay Says:

    Ah, my Lady –
    I could linger on your poetry for days on ends. I have such an attraction to your words and forms, to your subtleties and nuances. It’s such a joy to read your work. Beautiful, lovely, inspired, divine!
    Thank you, G.

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  18. hedgewitch Says:

    There is serenity and beauty here, but not without a cost–the image of the feet amidst the sands, leaving no wake, no trail, in a flow that begins and ends far beyond us is soothing yet also has like Mt Fuji, something monstrous in its perfection as well. Fine poem, Lady N.

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  19. ayala Says:

    In this nothing is revealed the fullness of life….the poem is just beautiful!

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  20. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Ayala…

    Thank you for reading and your lovely comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  21. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Hedgewitch…

    I think you nailed that contradiction…we don’t even had enough substance in our short lives, beyond our egos…to leave a mark in the sand.

    Mt. Fuji, being the ‘perfect’ mountain, is monstrous in it’s perfection. But it exists forever and a day.

    Thank you, Hedgewitch, for reading and your insightful comment.

    Lady N.

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  22. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Gay…that is one of the loveliest comments I have ever had here.

    Sometimes (most times for me…lol!) what we write we have to grow into. I am finding that so for me. As for forms?

    Well, they generally are simple in scope. Freeverse gives such liberty and I think this is the form I love the most. It communicates so much with so little trouble and possibly …effort.

    Back at you, Gay. I fall into your poetry and just float. Like water and wine.

    Lady Nyo

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  23. Window Lad Says:

    ..ah, i like this.. watching the snowing of Fujisan on the last steps of day is a way great treat.. while the falling of the Sakuras brought many many things in mind… thanks for writing this!

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  24. Jeff Says:

    It is only nature that is immortal . . . it is for us to be awed in the wonder of her.

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  25. expatinCAT Says:

    Two words came to mind on reading this: graceful and meditative. I liked it a lot… /// Peter.

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  26. Jannie Funster Says:

    How completely lovely!

    Alas, the sands of time do not wait for us. I feel I must surrender to the grains, and become part of the flow of them.

    The whole arm of the geisha verse is stunning in a wonderful poem.

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  27. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Jannie,

    Perhaps we have no real alternative to the sands of time?

    Thank you for reading and your lovely comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  28. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Peter, for your gracious comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  29. ladynyo Says:

    I agree, Jeff.

    All else is human ego.

    Thank you for reading and your comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  30. ladynyo Says:

    You are very welcome, Windowlad.

    Thank YOU for reading and your evocative comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  31. wolfsrosebud Says:

    Lovely write…

    “I realize once again

    I am no obstacle to

    the sands of time.”

    Thoughtful in many ways and warmth thorough the piece.

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  32. Laura Hegfield Says:

    Absolutely gorgeous Jane…so sensual. The last line is an exquisite close!

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  33. signed .............bkm Says:

    Very lovely Lady and the calm into nothing…perfect repose….thank you…bkm

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  34. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, bkm…

    it’s a balance after all…

    Thank you for reading and your comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  35. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Laura!

    I’ll get over to your site tomorrow..my eyes are dimming…

    Thank you so much for reading and your lovely commment.

    Jane

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  36. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, wolfsrosebud…

    thank you for reading and your lovely comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  37. henryclemmons Says:

    You capture that moment straight up and spot on. Was like dejavu. Very kool. ENjoy this ALOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    http://henryclemmons.wordpress.com/2011/08/15/i-just-dream/#comments

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  38. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Henry.

    Lady Nyo

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  39. brenda w Says:

    This is a piece I will read again. Five times now, I’ve read it, and each time it reveals something new. The last stanza speaks to my soul. Thank you for this write.

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  40. ladynyo Says:

    Thank is so kind of you Brenda.

    That last stanza speaks to my soul, too….I’m just waiting to understand it fully.

    Thank you for reading and your lovely, lovely, supportive comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  41. TheMsLvh Says:

    Absolutely loved the last stanza. Touched me deeply. Peaceful .

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  42. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, The Mslvh,

    for reading and your comment.

    Lady Nyo

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  43. Charles Elliott Says:

    Aren’t the snows of Fuji thinning now, too? — Wonders the man who has lost so much hair. Time passes, and I get an understanding and placid acceptance of that from your poem. Thanks!

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  44. ladynyo Says:

    Hello Charles…

    I would suppose that the snows of Fuji are thinning….global warming, etc.

    Thank you for reading and your comment.

    Lady Nyo

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