The above painting is one I did for the cover of a new poetry book “Pitcher of Moon” to be published…soon. Hopefully.
I can’t remember if this was a ‘challenge’ from an old poetry group or what. But I do know that we were given a string of words to work into cinquains. I liked the idea of a story made up of cinquains, and this was one of my early efforts.
Cinquains are an interesting poetry form. They aren’t very old, and really not too popular now. But they proceed from syllables and build on these until they reflect the beginning number of syllables. They proved harder than they looked.
Lady Nyo
COSMOS CINQUAINS
Universe-
Infinite space!
Distance to distance
Overwhelming all the senses
Forever.
–
Virgo
Chained sweet maiden
Like Andromeda there
Infinite patience is her fate
Virgin.
–
Orion
Hunter’s stealth
Steals earth’s orbit
Canis Major barking loudly
Sirius.
–
Aries
Orion’s ram
Joins the hunter gladly
Orbits across the nighttime sky
Pursues!
–
Emptiness!
Vast galaxies!
Filled with stars
Still distance looms unending
Void.
–
Hunter
Orion’s quest
Emotion burning fire!
Chases Virgo through the Heavens
Captures!
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Gravity
Heaviness bounded
Pulls both downwards
Sagittarius the Archer wounds
Falling.
–
Embrace
Luminous skin
Orion unsheathes cock
Virgo bleeds upon Hunter’s sword
Conquered.
–
Exploding
Supernova upward
Orion’s pleasure expanded
Virgo wilts, hymen pierced
Violated.
–
Black Hole
Emotion’s fire
Pleasure burned out quickly
Hurling Virgo into vastness
Disdained!
–
Jane Kohut-Bartels
Copyrighted, 2008-2013
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November 19, 2013 at 9:02 pm
oh wow jane… you brought the space with all its mysteries and magic alive in this… very cool painting as well..
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November 19, 2013 at 9:11 pm
Hi Claudia!
Well, cinquains were a passing fancy of mine about 4=5 years ago….LOL! I forgot that they actually were harder than they looked.
Thank you so much. I was so touched by your own poem today. My soul desperately needed to read that. I would love to see your paintings, too.
Funny how poetry leads to painting and painting leads back to poetry.
Hugs,
Jane
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November 19, 2013 at 10:18 pm
nice…the heavens have always captured my imagination and the story that they tell as well…or the stories we have given them in their clustering…ha. i like the intimacy you give them as well…a well timed supernova there…smiles.
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November 19, 2013 at 10:42 pm
Thanks, Brother Brian!
Jane
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November 19, 2013 at 11:39 pm
Truly wondrous and lovely….just like the beautiful cosmos 😉 Nicely done!
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November 20, 2013 at 12:21 am
Amazing story you’ve woven from stars. 🙂
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November 20, 2013 at 2:01 am
Thank you, Nara. I’ve just got home from a flamenco class where I still suck and it’s late, so I’ll be around to read tomorrow.
Thank you again for reading and your comment.
Jane
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November 20, 2013 at 2:02 am
Thank you, Morgan.
It’s late here, and I’ll be around to read your blog tomorrow.
Thank you!
Jane
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November 20, 2013 at 5:39 am
Loved the story you told of the cosmos..beautifully woven. A new form, I had not heard of before..may have been difficult, but the finished product flowed nicely
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November 20, 2013 at 11:32 am
Beautiful and good to read your words again, Jane.
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November 20, 2013 at 12:37 pm
Hi Ayala!
Good to hear from you. Been a while. Cinquains were something I did when I first thought of poetry, and now? well, they are harder than they look. LOL!
So glad you liked these….and I’ll be around today after the damn dentist!
Hugs,
Janed
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November 20, 2013 at 12:40 pm
Hi Dorianna! Thank you for reading and your lovely comment. Actually, cinquains isn’t THAT new or old…lol! I think around the turn of the 20th century?
When I first thought of poetry, I tried the form, and did a lot of them, and then dropped them. LOL! But they are a illegitimate poetry form and you don’t see them anymore…or at least I don’t.
Why don’t you try a few? I think it sharpens skills…
Hugs, Jane and will be around after the dentist.
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November 20, 2013 at 5:27 pm
Oh wow. This painting radiates depth, mystery, rippling lushness. Really magnificent image for a book cover, especially entitled Pitcher of Moon. Breathtaking. I could feel my pupils dilating as I looked at it. love CS
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November 20, 2013 at 5:55 pm
Dear Jane – I admire this poem very much. We seem to be on a similar wavelength. I’ve been looking at space sites and considering the universe as well. I wanted to write a carousel from the point of view of living forever. Didn’t get it written, at least not yet. This pleases me very much!
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November 20, 2013 at 6:03 pm
Dear Gay!, oh, you will. You are one of the most prolific and deep poets I know.
And yes, we seem to be on a similar wavelength. LOL!…especially after our late night conversations this week.
Hugs.
Jane
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November 20, 2013 at 6:04 pm
Hi CS….I am so glad you saw this small painting…not bigger than 8×5, trying to paint in smaller dimensions now.
WEll, I figured for something called Pitcher of Moon, there had to be a moon somewhere in it. LOL!
Thank you, sweetie…
Love, Jane
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November 20, 2013 at 6:06 pm
Hi Morgan…thank you for reading and your lovely comment. yes, the cosmos, though we don’t understand much about it really, is beautiful. The cradle of life.
hugs,
Jane
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November 20, 2013 at 10:17 pm
Absolutely wonderful Jane!
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November 20, 2013 at 10:41 pm
Laura Dear….I tried to get to your blog today but for some reason, WordPress wouldn’t allow me in. Tomorrow I will attempt again.
How is the quilt going? I think of you (and Gay!) frequently and love you both.
My deepest gratitude to you for what you do and what you mean.
Love,
Jane
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