Sonnet:”Erotica Sea”….Adults Only.

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(Watercolor, Jane Kohut-Bartels, 2000)

Nick Nicholson has worked hard to reissue “A Seasoning of Lust”, first published in 2009.  As with first books, there were changes that needed to be made, in format and content.  It is a mildly erotic book, reflecting the milieu of the first writer’s group I was first in.  However, I wanted to write more than erotica and left and went on.  As I became to hold, erotica was just a seasoning, not the whole dinner. Hence, the title of that first book.  In a few weeks it will be reissued on Amazon with a new cover and other surprises.  Thank you, dear Nick.  Your friendship and eagle eye has made all the difference.

Jane 

I’m going to include this for the d’verse challenge.  It’s my first sonnet, my first nautical painting, and from my first book: “A Seasoning of Lust”.  A lot of firsts for me but not I am sure in the expectations of d’verse readers.  LOL!

 

 Erotica Sea

O, give me a taste of  you and your tongue

pry open my lips with that soft muscle,

plunge in warm waters of an ocean sung

by lusting mermaids, loins in a tussle,

a clam’s foot that tastes the brine of passion

claims undersea caves of another route.

Pull my loins to yours in a riptide grip,

sound my deep warm sea, your cock a stiff mast

the weight of you pushing me downwards fast

hips gyrate in a nautilus spiral.

With your foghorn’s groan, semen’s saltiness

floods my womb like the moon’s tidal offering,

we float weightless, that sweet mystic sea sings,

bodies sway, like abandoned ship’s rigging.

Jane Kohut-Bartels

Copyrighted, 2008-2016

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20 Responses to “Sonnet:”Erotica Sea”….Adults Only.”

  1. kelly Says:

    Oh, my… fanning myself over here 🙂
    I just adore that ending, beautiful.

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  2. Glenn Buttkus Says:

    What I think I enjoyed most about your erotic sea romp was the juxtaposition, for me, of the ocean as womb, & that the saltwater within us reminds one that once we too had gills, were birthed as intact eggs, developing within the shell, before we got the bright idea to grow lungs that sustained longer forays on land. Of course, you had me at /cock like a mast/.

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  3. ladynyo Says:

    Lol! Well, when I wrote this sonnet I must have had an inkling of sea as womb but I like your interpretation. I just experienced a ‘wild mouse’ where I had no control of it. Bad mouse. Of course, some of us still have gills and some have tails. It doesn’t seem to me that we have evolved very far from the sea. I have had this opening line in my head for 6 years since I was at Tybee Island: “Mother Of Us All”….but never got past that. LOL! The ocean does that. Thank you, Glenn for reading and your comment. Jane

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  4. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Kelly. 10 years ago, I was in a writing group that dedicated themselves to only erotica. I learned, and just couldn’t continue doing so. The world was bigger than that for me. I took a page from Anais Nin…where she thought the world compressed into writers writing erotica for some dirty old man. I didn’t want to, and felt like that was what was required. Erotic is just a seasoning…not the whole dinner. LOL! Thank you for reading and your comment. Jane

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  5. Brian Says:

    Both the painting and the poem are marvelous.

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  6. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Brian. I wondered about linking with dverse on this one….but I thought I would chance it. LOL!

    Thank you again, Friend Brian. I’ll be over tomorrow. I’ve had a full day of proofing comments by Nick Nicholson for the reissue of my first rotten book. LOL! I am tired and looking for a glass of wine.

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  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Says:

    A nautical erotica.. what a unique first.. that’s really impressive. The waves and the mast, the brine… hot indeed

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  8. Grace Says:

    My other persona loves this to bits, smiles ~ I should sharpen my words to write erotica again ~ Don’t be shy in sharing these kind of verses – we are all adults here.

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  9. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Grace. this is about as erotic as I can get in writing erotica. LOL! There should be something literary in erotica, or it falls to porn…or something like that. I had to curb my enthusiasm for erotica when my son was in the Navy….his shipmates were reading my blog…LOL…and I didn’t want to corrupt the young men. I’ll be over to read tomorrow. I’m shot tonight.

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  10. ladynyo Says:

    well, the Lutherans from my childhood would be shocked, shocked, shocked. LOL! It was written as a sonnet but it’s been so long since I wrote sonnets I don’t know if it really is. Thanks, Bjorn.

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  11. Victoria C. Slotto Says:

    This is just beautiful, Jane–the metaphoric aspects work so well, as does the sonnet form. Your statement about lust being the seasoning–just perfect!

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  12. Arcadia Maria Says:

    Quite erotic and sensual. Thanks for sharing.

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  13. whippetwisdom Says:

    Your painting is beautiful and I love the final lines ‘that sweet mystic sea sings,bodies sway, like abandoned ship’s rigging.’

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  14. ladynyo Says:

    thank you so much for reading this sonnet and liking the painting. I deeply appreciate it!

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  15. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  16. ladynyo Says:

    LOL! Victoria. When I wrote it I had to look up ‘metaphor’ …wasn’t then quite sure what it was. LOL! Seems to me that whole sonnet is just metaphor. And yes, that was what drove me from ERWA (Erotic Readers and Writers Assoc.). They didn’t seem to know or perhaps care the difference between erotica and porn. Thank you so much, Victoria for reading and your supportive comment.

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  17. whippetwisdom Says:

    You are very welcome Jane. It is not the kind of poetry I read or write but you did well here. The painting is super!☺

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  18. ladynyo Says:

    It’s the kind of poetry I got away from after 3 years. It was too loaded with issues…whether we were writing erotica or porn. I chose to leave and expand. Thank you, Xenia.

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  19. whimsygizmo Says:

    GORGEOUS painting. I love how the colors in the water – all those blues and greens – layer, much like the poem itself. Beautiful.

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  20. ladynyo Says:

    THank you! I found that I loved painting water…especially reflections of ducks, geese in the water. ships are a bit harder. LOL!.. Thank you for reading and seeing that painting. Most don’t. Sigh.

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