Cosmic Couplings

D’versepoets challenges poets to write a poem with repetitions. This is my attempt.

Lady Nyo


Cosmic Couplings


Come kiss my warm lips
cup my breast in your rough hand
growl into my mouth
raise the color of pale desire
blow cinders into lust
create steel where there’s water
command with your need.

Answer mine with that of yours
Answer yours with that of mine.

Press hard into skin
flesh opens like a bud
legs twisting round legs
hands clenching fruit-like cheeks
raised upon your sword
spread flesh that yearns to gasp.

Answer mine with that of yours
Answer yours with that of mine.

Over us, the stars
glitter–laughing witness
I reach up and hang
on two and lift my breast
level with your mouth.
You suckle like a babe,
and strain into my womb.

Answering mine with that of yours
Answering yours with that of mine.

Jane Kohut-Bartels
Copyrighted, 2017

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22 Responses to “Cosmic Couplings”

  1. kanzensakura Says:

    Very nice. Sensual. Love the repeating refrain.


  2. ladynyo Says:

    thanks, Toni. don’t know if this meets the bar, but right now it’s the best I can do. I was blown away by your piece. Marvelous. Thank you again.


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Says:

    The refrain is very good with it’s slight variation of repetition.. really very very erotic.

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  4. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Bjorn. I’m down with bronchitis and couldn’t get my head around much …. Trying to curtail the erotic a bit….just not to scare the children and the chickens. Thanks, friend Bjorn…for reading and your gentle comment. Bjorn! Just noticed I screwed up the last repetition….left out the proper refrain. Rewrote it. Thanks again.


  5. Victoria C. Slotto Says:

    Love the sensual imagery in this, Jane. That second stanza is so superb. Erotic poetry is so effective when imagery is used like that.


  6. Glenn Buttkus Says:

    The sensuality is sensational, yet beauteous, gentle, & yes, even cosmic, Copulation, for me, represents a rare moment when two become one, with the universe & their own desires.


  7. ladynyo Says:

    Glenn…that is the best diagnosis of erotica I have ever read. Thank you so much for understanding what this attempt at repetition was meant to do.


  8. ladynyo Says:

    LOL! Victoria, I had to go back and read that second stanza….LOL! Erotic poetry is effective when it doesn’t fall in the gutter. There IS a great difference between literary erotica and porn but many don’t see or care about the difference. Thank you so much for reading and your insightful comment.


  9. Raivenne Says:

    Answer. Mine. Yours. Nicely sensual and the refrain works so well here.


  10. kim881 Says:

    Jane, your erotic poetry hits the spot, with its gentle but also imperious urgency and repetition. I love the lines
    ‘growl into my mouth
    raise the color of pale desire
    blow cinders into lust’
    I can hear the engine revving!


  11. ladynyo Says:

    Thanks Kim…. I have bronchitis right now and there is no erotic content in my mind or body. LOL! erotica is something I wrote before, but went on to other stuff. but it’s a genuine literary genre and is so misused. I think it takes a gentle approach so it doesn’t fall into porn. Sometimes it’s like walking a tightrope. Thank you, Again, Kim….that’s my favorite stanza, too.

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  12. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Raivenne. For reading and your comment.


  13. kim881 Says:

    Get well soon, Jane xx


  14. maria Says:

    OMG~! Such sensual piece, JAne. 😀 Love the imagery.


  15. paul scribbles Says:

    Goodness me…this is raw unbridled truth wrapped in a velvet cloth that is then draped sensuously across my being. The dance of the cosmic in pure human form. Wonderous.


  16. ladynyo Says:

    LOL!!! Wonderous praise indeed! Thank you, Paul.

    Liked by 1 person

  17. ladynyo Says:

    thank you, kim….it’s really slowing me down and I haven’t gotten around to return comments yet. Hopefully Sat.

    Liked by 1 person

  18. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Maria.


  19. Says:

    The sensual imagery in your work is a masterpiece to me.

    Love this poem. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  20. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Charlie! That is high praise indeed! I hope you get a chance to read my Haibun, “Help Can’t Wait”….About a tornado in 1998 where I witnessed the aftermath. Tornadoes are Nature’s scimitars. Sunday South Georgia was hit by tornadoes and 18 people killed. More missing. These tragedies shock each time they happen. Thank you, Charlie. Bless you.

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  21. Says:

    You welcome my friend. And I will surely check it out now.

    P.S If you get a chance check out my new post. 🙂


  22. ladynyo Says:

    I certainly will, sweetie! Glad too~

    Liked by 1 person

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