“Queen of Sheba”

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Queen of Sheba” is a poem in flux…movement.  I published it in the new edition of “A Seasoning of Lust”, published in mid December, 2016, by Amazon.com.  I’ve changed it a bit here, and I believe many poems can be revised, rewritten.  I tried for rhythm in the beginning and found it hard to sustain. 

Lady Nyo

Queen of Sheba

She walked right by me,

The Queen of Sheba

Black skin glinting like steel in the sun.

Proud breasts topped with prouder nipples

Black cherry rubies jutting east to west.

Spangled turban hits the North Star

Jeweled feet tramples South Pole beneath,

All space guarded by curved, sharp fangs,

Such dangerous territory–alien ground.

Tattooed ribbons down sinuous arms

Black snakes born with sensuous intent.

Hot sun glances off gold-tipped teeth–

Shot of mystery tween mahogany lips,

Rarely a smile– more of a sneer.

Kohl eyes flashing steady disdain,

Measuring decayed urban jungle

From cracked sidewalks littered

With  broken shards of broken lives,

Burnt out neon signs,

Tumbled pool halls,

Violence growing—

Like kudzu in the night.

I offered the most honeyed of fruits,

Celestial music of spinning spheres,

Jewels of priceless glowing stars,

Captured in baskets for her fondling,

Brought to earth to surround with

Undeniable majesty-

An aura of delight,

Honor,

Cosmic glory.

Ah, Cruel Queen of Sheba!

No glance in my direction.

Obviously  other fish to fry,

Plenty of empires to plunder–

Though I promised the

Wealth,

Splendor,

Fame,

And the Wisdom of Solomon.

Jane Kohut-Bartels

Copyrighted, 2017, from “A Seasoning of Lust”,  published December, 2016, by Amazon. com.

 

 

 

 

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16 Responses to ““Queen of Sheba””

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Says:

    Love this Jane, I can see this stately woman.. the contrast between her royal appearance and the grit of neon is perfect.

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  2. Mish Says:

    You have shared a treasure with us here. I especially love the third stanza, the intensity of description and then…”Rarely a smile– more of a sneer.”

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  3. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Mish. I have been trying to improve the rhythm in this poem, but can’t get it going after the first three line…can’t sustain it. Thank you for your very kind comment and of course, for reading this poem.

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  4. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Bjorn. This is one poem that I think I will be always revising, trying to get the rhythm back. Thank you for reading and your kindly comment.

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  5. Iris Says:

    I love these sections:

    “Proud breasts topped with prouder nipples
    Black cherry rubies jutting east to west.”

    “All space guarded by curved, sharp fangs”

    “Tattooed ribbons down sinuous arms”

    “Kohl eyes flashing steady disdain,
    Measuring decayed urban jungle”

    “I offered the most honeyed of fruits,
    Celestial music of spinning spheres,
    Jewels of priceless glowing stars,
    Captured in baskets for her fondling”

    Oh my. I am completely captivated.

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  6. ladynyo Says:

    lol! Thank you, Iris! for reading and your lovely comment.

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  7. Thotpurge Says:

    A great scene you paint…the lady comes through shining and strong.

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  8. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Thotpurge. I think I know here down here. Or a number of Queens of Sheba.

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  9. kanzensakura Says:

    Oh I like this! Reminds me of Margaret Mitchell in the best way!

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  10. ladynyo Says:

    LOL! You are probably one of the few who know who she is. But THANK YOU very much.

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  11. Grace Says:

    Love the details and the character of the woman…wow!

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  12. Nan Mykel Says:

    I am impressed with your energy and drive and ability to channel it through strong poetry. Glad she visited the urban jungle!

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  13. kim881 Says:

    What a luscious woman, Jane, with her ‘Black cherry rubies jutting east to west’, spangled turban and jewelled feet! I love the ‘Kohl eyes flashing steady disdain’ – what an attitude!

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  14. ladynyo Says:

    She’s got attitude to spare. Thanks, Kim

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  15. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Nan. You never know where she might show up.

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  16. ladynyo Says:

    She’s not milquetoast! Thank you, Grace.

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