“Musings on a Closing Day”



Over at dversepoets the prompt is the word ‘heart’ included in a poem.

Lady Nyo


“Musings on a Closing Day”

I move my chair

to observe Mt. Fuji-

monstrous perfection

topped with the cooling crust

of spring snows.


Languid movement

of a branch,

like a geisha

unfurling her arm

from a gray kimono,

makes petals fall,

a scented, pink snow

covering my upturned face

with careless kisses.


Timid winds caress

my limbs,

a fleeting relief

to tired bones

brittle now with

the sullen defeat of life.


Raked sand of garden

waves barely disturbed

by feet like two gray stones

as grains flow

round ankles.


I realize once again

I am no obstacle to

the sands of time.


My heart is quieted

by the passage of nothing

for in this nothing

is revealed the fullness of life.


Jane Kohut-Bartels

Copyrighted, 2016  “Musings on a Closing Day” published in the new second edition of “A Seasoning of Lust”, Amazon.com, December, 2016

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13 Responses to ““Musings on a Closing Day””

  1. Janice Says:

    Absolutely beautiful poetry 🙂 I can particularly relate to the snow moon as I’ve been enjoying it wax all week (covered by clouds last night). So many beautiful words throughout your post, but two favorites are ‘snow beams falling to earth’ and ‘Earth glazed by frosted diamonds’.


  2. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Janice!~ I was feeling guilty, because I composed this at the post! LOL! Little thought into this poem, but the Snow Moon was so beautiful. Felt I should take a stab at it. Thank you, Janice. I deeply appreciate your comment.

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  3. Janice Says:

    Well they do so that sometimes the best writing is what you write down spontaneously 🙂


  4. ladynyo Says:

    I agree….but that hasn’t happened for a while for me. LOL!

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  5. lillian Says:

    Absolutely love this – especially the second and last stanzas!

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  6. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Says:

    This is lovely… the images of the snow and the geisha, but most of all the closing.. the nothing. I feel very much like this is the most important thing, like the pauses overwhelms the word…


  7. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Bjorn! This poem is contemplative….something I don’t allow myself much to do. I need to do more of this….and write more of this. Thank you so much for reading, understanding and your lovely comment. it gives me pause….


  8. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Lillian…for reading and your lovely comment. I like that last stanza, too. I guess the essence of the poem? Or message?

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  9. frankhubeny Says:

    I liked the lines “I am no obstacle to

    the sands of time”.


  10. ladynyo Says:

    I’m thankful Frank, you could find a few lines in this poem to like.


  11. NJ Says:

    Oh, this is so beautiful. It has created such a lovely image in my head. Absolutely love this 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  12. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, NJ! Thank you for reading and your lovely comment. We work for those images, and when they happen in the heads of readers, that’s a good sign! LOL! Thank you again.

    Liked by 1 person

  13. NJ Says:

    Haha, so true.


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