Some New Haiku….


(Summer Dusk, oil, Jane Kohut-Bartels, 2010)

I struggle with this form, and this weekend just decided to write something from direct observation.  Little thought behind this, more eyes than anything else.  I know I violate much in proper haiku form but that will come with study.  It’s summer and haiku seems the perfect literary form to use.

Lady Nyo


Summer storms threaten

Gun metal skies become pitch

Birds shelter in place


The air sullen, heavy

I sense the rain being born

Grass rises to drink


Two hawks look over

Penned chickens awaiting Fate

Dogs too hot to chase


Dark skies are heavy

My bones answer with dull pain

The sins of aging


Black storms gather

A blessing of rain to come

Thunder rattles glass


A murder of crows

Watch a cat passing beneath

Suddenly alarmed.


Autumn evening

The wind whips up fallen leaves

Scattering the quilts


Ho! The ice cream truck!

Children swarm, a plague of locust

A child without cash


Summer night brightens

Stars whisper to each other

More than grains of sand.


The soil our bed

Our classrooms and our graves.

reborn to the world.


Jane Kohut-Bartels

Copyrighted, 2018

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2 Responses to “Some New Haiku….”

  1. Maureen Sudlow Says:

    good observations and ku – but don’t let that 5-7-5 requirement trap you. English haiku can be much briefer…

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  2. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Maureen. I am very comfortable with the classical 5-7-5 form. Though much earlier Japanese form could be 4-6, or 3-4. English haiku sometimes is not haiku at all…and I have done this, too.

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