(Summer Dusk, oil, Jane Kohut-Bartels, 2010)
I struggle with this form, and this weekend just decided to write something from direct observation. Little thought behind this, more eyes than anything else. I know I violate much in proper haiku form but that will come with study. It’s summer and haiku seems the perfect literary form to use.
Lady Nyo
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Summer storms threaten
Gun metal skies become pitch
Birds shelter in place
The air sullen, heavy
I sense the rain being born
Grass rises to drink
Two hawks look over
Penned chickens awaiting Fate
Dogs too hot to chase
Dark skies are heavy
My bones answer with dull pain
The sins of aging
Black storms gather
A blessing of rain to come
Thunder rattles glass
A murder of crows
Watch a cat passing beneath
Suddenly alarmed.
Autumn evening
The wind whips up fallen leaves
Scattering the quilts
Ho! The ice cream truck!
Children swarm, a plague of locust
A child without cash
Summer night brightens
Stars whisper to each other
More than grains of sand.
The soil our bed
Our classrooms and our graves.
reborn to the world.
–
Jane Kohut-Bartels
Copyrighted, 2018
Tags: direct observation, Haiku, new haiku, oil painting
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July 1, 2018 at 10:33 pm
good observations and ku – but don’t let that 5-7-5 requirement trap you. English haiku can be much briefer…
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July 1, 2018 at 11:13 pm
Thank you, Maureen. I am very comfortable with the classical 5-7-5 form. Though much earlier Japanese form could be 4-6, or 3-4. English haiku sometimes is not haiku at all…and I have done this, too.
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