“Cold Moon”

COLD MOON

Cold Moon, December- moon,

Sits in a blackened sky,

Passive, brittle,

A skinflint’s lantern–

Barely shedding light over

A frozen landscape,

Chiding, disdainful

Like an old man

With a smeared monocle.

This month’s moonlight

Would not sustain a mole!

Jane Kohut-Bartels

Copyrighted, 2009

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8 Responses to ““Cold Moon””

  1. Berowne Says:

    Brrr…

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  2. ladynyo Says:

    LOL!

    I have been thinking of the effect of shortening words in a poem.

    Or less of them.

    Going after the visceral.

    Thank you, Berowne for reading.

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  3. Margie Says:

    I think you managed just fine! I have to go put on a sweater now…

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  4. ladynyo Says:

    LOL! Oh, cute, Margie!

    For the past two years, I have been influenced greatly by Japanese poetry forms. I have written of my discoveries on the blog, but this January I have given myself a gift: For the next few months, I will read and read deeply, those beautiful tanka and other forms that have been around since before the 8th century in Japan. They usually take the form of one sentiment, and a lot of that longing and loss. But they are amongst the finest examples of erotic poetry I have come across. I am thinking of two women poets, centuries between them, that set a standard in love poems: Ono no Komachi and Izumi Shikibu.

    I think the Lady Nyo’s Poems …(that Lady Nyo….not this Lady Nyo) were influenced by her reading of this poetry, but she comes from the `16th century.

    Perhaps it’s heating with a wood stove, elegant though it looks, that is inspiring these ‘cold’ poems!

    Thank you, Margie for reading….and best of all! Responding!

    Lady Nyo

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  5. Berowne Says:

    > the effect of shortening words in a poem

    The very un-Japanese Milton does that in “Paradise Lost” where he describes a dismal, perhaps hellish scene as “Rocks, caves, lakes, fens, bogs, and shades of death”. Your lunar landscape is quite cozy in comparison…

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  6. ladynyo Says:

    I’ll take ‘cozy’ over Hell any day.

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  7. Berowne Says:

    You’d think everybody would; and yet according to Dante et al. the other place is quite heavily populated. Maybe they know something?

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  8. ladynyo Says:

    I would rather sit on a bench in Hell than a bench in Heaven …..so many of my most interesting friends are in Hell I am sure.

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