“Sunset”, Jane Kohut-Bartels, watercolor, 2008
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The Dark Leans In
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The dark leans in, cool and necessary.
The wind lessens, quiets the
hambone frenzy of wind chimes.
They ceased their cacophony,
Letting birds this night
test their dusk-calls,
unsure of voices muted
by the silence of season past.
Off in the distance a lone train whistle
perhaps the last train home
Before night blackens the earth.
It will need a fat moon to brighten its tracks….
How silent the night!
Now given to owls,
Piteous cries of mourning doves
And the rustle of something
In the tall weeds,
Something mysterious–
But probably not.
The night is the territory of creatures
With night vision and silent flights,
Of owls with upturned wings,
Silent, silent, deadly drones
Red eyes like burning coals
And talons like razors.
A banshee scream of hunter
And the resounding cry of prey.
No man walks about the dark,
No one would without fear
Knowing what is given by nature is not
On par with the lowliness creature of this dark.
Only the slight babble of the brook,
The brook that fears no rocks
Or fallen limbs or anything except drought
Makes the push to daylight where we
Are sure of our place,
Our courage renewed.
The night belongs to other species
As the dark leans in, cool and necessary
The wind picks up, rattles leaves beneath feet
And we turn our steps towards a world
Of less mystery.
Jane Kohut-Bartels
Copyrighted, 2016
November 22, 2016 at 11:19 pm
your art and words merge
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November 23, 2016 at 1:12 am
I linked you up Jane ~ I love the sounds in the silent night – birds, owls, rustling weeds ~ This is my favorite part:
The night belongs to other species
As the dark leans in, cool and necessary
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November 23, 2016 at 1:24 am
Very lovely
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November 23, 2016 at 1:47 am
thank you, Grace….
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November 23, 2016 at 1:50 am
Hello Moondustwriter!! So happy to hear from you. Thank you so much for reading and for leaving this comment. It is good to see you again.
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November 23, 2016 at 2:40 am
thank you, Arcadia Maria, for reading and leaving a comment.
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November 23, 2016 at 3:23 am
I like how each stanza is a separate poem yet all linked tonight by the noises of things that go bump in the night.
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November 23, 2016 at 3:33 am
Oh this is pure perfection. Lost in it I am it, in its pure perfection.
Kind regards
Anna :o]
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November 23, 2016 at 7:28 am
Good morning Jane! I’m not long up and have just read your poem.
I love the personification in the opening line, inviting me to read, and the sound effects of the ‘hambone frenzy of wind chimes’, the birds’ ‘dusk-calls’, ‘lone train whistle’ and the ‘rustle of something’, which create such atmosphere I could feel the chill of the night air. You’ve used light beautifully, too, with the image of a ‘fat moon’ to brighten the tracks and the ‘red eyes like burning coals’ – there is a distinct change in atmosphere, with a sense of danger. And then such a gentle ending!
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November 23, 2016 at 8:19 am
I really like the sense of night leaning in. There is a sense of weight in darkness that I can feel (as fear for instance). The description of owls as orbs is great too…
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November 23, 2016 at 1:04 pm
thanks, Bjorn.
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November 23, 2016 at 1:08 pm
Thank you, Kim. I appreciate your reading and your comment. Loading these poems with description makes poetry fun or at least interesting. I was afraid there wasn’t enough mention of light here, but you pulled what little I had. The countryside, at least where I was raised was totally dark in the night. Thank you, again.
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November 23, 2016 at 1:09 pm
Hello, Anna! Thank you for reading. I have stuff to work on in this poem….but I thank you for reading and your lovely comment!
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November 23, 2016 at 1:10 pm
Hey Brian….thank you for reading and your kind comment. I am not awake yet, but will look for those noises of tings that go bump in the night.
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November 23, 2016 at 1:13 pm
It’s always dark here where I live too – there are no street lights and only the house lights and the lights from the local pub illumination. We usually take a torch with us if we have to walk in the evening. We do get to see plenty of stars!
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November 23, 2016 at 1:48 pm
Wow, this is a fabulous night write!! I love the animal activity but also the sound of the last train whistle…sets stage for mystery.
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November 23, 2016 at 6:24 pm
Spooky…something mysterious~but probably not…..got me.
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November 23, 2016 at 8:36 pm
LOL! that got me, too. Thanks for reading and your comment Paul.
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November 23, 2016 at 8:37 pm
Thank you, Lynn. I’m going to reply to comments after Thanksgiving. So thank you and have a great one!~
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November 23, 2016 at 8:38 pm
oh, we have plenty of lights here in Atlanta…too many. But I was raised in the country and there were no lights at all. Miss that, greatly.
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November 23, 2016 at 10:34 pm
Night walkers.
vampires of the
night in spirit escaping
broad day light oF eYes
that no longer stand A Sun..
i literally was
one of those
creatures for
years before.. my
friend.. without
the ability to
physically
tolerate
light or
sound..
symptom of
the worst pain known
to mankind.. tolerated as
hell.. type two trigeminal
neuralgia from wake to sleep
for 66 months total.. in real hell here..
3 am.. the only time i went out when all was
quiet.. and street liGhts lit eYes behind sHades
like the noon day sun.. what i did lEArn then
was
to
look
within
as tHeRe
was no longer
any place outside
otHer than dARk..
how happy i was
to finAlly
fiNd
liGht
inSide
impossible
to extinguish now
more as the blind and
deaf in pain lEArn to see inside..:)
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November 23, 2016 at 11:34 pm
I am sorry for your suffering for those long months. Hopefully you are better now. I hate pain in any source.
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November 23, 2016 at 11:35 pm
Thanks my
FriEnd
On the
Opposite
End of Joy now..
Happy Thanksgiving..:)
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November 24, 2016 at 12:28 am
And Happy Thanksgiving to you!!
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