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I was unhappy with the opening line….and wrote to Dr. RK Singh in Mumbai about this. He suggested “Winter’s naked trees” for the opening, and it works. He also wrote of too many adjectives. I took some out. Perhaps it reads better.
Lady Nyo
WINTER WIDOW
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Winter’s naked trees,
Lit by a slivered crescent moon,
Casting shadows upon a frigid ground,
Skeletons in the moonlight
Dark ghosts.
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A fresh widow
Little flesh about her,
Resembling those brittle branches
In the sullen night.
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There was a time when she was juicy,
Ripe with swelling life,
Velvet of skin.
She lapped at life with full lips,
Embracing passions.
–
Speared on her husband
She moaned, screamed with laughter,
Sheer joy.
Her life had been full,
Overflowing,
Desirable,
Endless-
A portrait of promise.
–
He died and life turned surreal,
The reason for living gone.
Life’s temperature grown cold,
Like him under the soil.
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It started to snow,
A gentle covering of branch
Bush, ground,
A tender benediction,
A white blanket to her pain.
–
She knelt in the garden
Suddenly grateful to feel anything
Even the cold.
–
She would live,
She knew this now,
But he must be so cold under the snow.
–
Jane Kohut-Bartels
Copyrighted, 2014
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