Choka: “Grief”

My beautiful picture

My beautiful picture

Over at dversepoets pub, the challenge is one of writing a poem expressing expressionism.  We will see….this was a hard one for me.

Lady Nyo

 

 

 

 

 

Her lovely snow-flesh

 

the tracery of blue veins

 

upon long slim arms

 

like embracing filaments

 

fold themselves gently

 

cold, smooth marble her skin

 

water streams from eyes

 

looks upon such delicate

 

unearthly beauty, now still.

 

 

 

Grief, mine, stoppered up,

 

memories, glass-sharpened

 

cuts a shattered heart.

 

no hope for recovery,

 

life folded inward

 

her pain is over, done with,

 

mine, just beginning.

 

Each of grief’s ragged breath draws

 

out, to join in her silence.

 

 

 

Jane Kohut-Bartels

 

Copyrighted, 2017

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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21 Responses to “Choka: “Grief””

  1. Bev Says:

    Exquisitely portrays grief. So beautifully written.

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  2. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Bev. I almost deleted this poem because no one seemed to bother to read…but thank you. I don’t know if it followed the dversepoets prompt but today I can’t do anything better. One of those days. Thanks again for reading and your very kind comment. it goes a long way today.

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  3. kanzensakura Says:

    I love the description of her body…it is expressionistic but in my mind, I keep seeing Ophelia as painted by Miilais. Poignant.

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  4. georgeplace2013 Says:

    “Grief, mine, stoppered up”…. I’ve felt that way before. You’ve given me goosebumps.

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  5. Grace Says:

    A very paintful time Jane ~ One passes on, with pains gone, but leaving the loved ones with heavy hearts ~

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  6. Nan Mykel Says:

    I really liked especially the first line. I don’t think I’ve ever used “stoppered.” but it fits well.

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  7. ladynyo Says:

    LOL! Thanks Nan. It’s one of my favorite words…usually “stoppered up”. My Dutch surroundings growing up, I think. Thanks for reading and your comment. Cheers!

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  8. ladynyo Says:

    Yep, Grace. grief. In all it’s distorted ‘life’. thanks, Grace.

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  9. ladynyo Says:

    Hi Georgeplace….I think this is universal. Thank you for your reading and your comment.

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  10. ladynyo Says:

    Oh! that fits! I wasn’t sure what it was, Toni….but decided to throw it in the ring. Thank you so much for reading and your comment.

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  11. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Says:

    The description of the pale flesh and veins, the two parts juxtaposed against each other create this harrowing sadness,,

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  12. Jane Dougherty Says:

    Death is like that, ice cold and permanent. An ending for one, a beginning for another, but both without issue.

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  13. ladynyo Says:

    Hi Jane. That’s exactly it. Thank you, Jane for reading and your insightful comment.

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  14. ladynyo Says:

    Hi Bjorn. Harrowing is an excellent word. Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  15. Jane Dougherty Says:

    My pleasure 🙂

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  16. Pleasant Street Says:

    The prompt be hanged.
    This is so real and moving, delicate then really hard and cutting. I’m going to bookmark this to read again later

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  17. ladynyo Says:

    LOL! That’s my sentiment about most prompts….but it’s usually the shock of the new. LOL! Than you so much. It is a dip into grief…as much as I can.

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  18. Bekkie Sanchez Says:

    I also wrote about loss for this. Someone always loses when death rears it’s ugly head.

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  19. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Bekkie. I’ll come read. I am going off these groups because my own life has become more complicated…so I will disappear for a while..but not frm my blog. I’m at the end stages of a novel and I need the concentration of energies. Thank you so much for reading and your supportive comments.

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  20. Bekkie Sanchez Says:

    You’re welcome! Good luck with your novel! I need to work on my first book of poetry I keep saying I’m going to do it but I’ve put it off. I hope you find happiness whatever you find! Hugs!

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  21. ladynyo Says:

    Thank you, Bekkie….and hugs back!

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