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Over at dversepoets pub, the challenge is one of writing a poem expressing expressionism. We will see….this was a hard one for me.
Lady Nyo
Her lovely snow-flesh
the tracery of blue veins
upon long slim arms
like embracing filaments
fold themselves gently
cold, smooth marble her skin
water streams from eyes
looks upon such delicate
unearthly beauty, now still.
Grief, mine, stoppered up,
memories, glass-sharpened
cuts a shattered heart.
no hope for recovery,
life folded inward
her pain is over, done with,
mine, just beginning.
Each of grief’s ragged breath draws
out, to join in her silence.
Jane Kohut-Bartels
Copyrighted, 2017
Tags: Choka, dversepoets.com, expressionism, grief, poetry
February 17, 2017 at 12:12 am
Exquisitely portrays grief. So beautifully written.
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February 17, 2017 at 12:16 am
Thank you, Bev. I almost deleted this poem because no one seemed to bother to read…but thank you. I don’t know if it followed the dversepoets prompt but today I can’t do anything better. One of those days. Thanks again for reading and your very kind comment. it goes a long way today.
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February 17, 2017 at 12:42 am
I love the description of her body…it is expressionistic but in my mind, I keep seeing Ophelia as painted by Miilais. Poignant.
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February 17, 2017 at 1:29 am
“Grief, mine, stoppered up”…. I’ve felt that way before. You’ve given me goosebumps.
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February 17, 2017 at 2:00 am
A very paintful time Jane ~ One passes on, with pains gone, but leaving the loved ones with heavy hearts ~
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February 17, 2017 at 3:34 am
I really liked especially the first line. I don’t think I’ve ever used “stoppered.” but it fits well.
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February 17, 2017 at 4:35 am
LOL! Thanks Nan. It’s one of my favorite words…usually “stoppered up”. My Dutch surroundings growing up, I think. Thanks for reading and your comment. Cheers!
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February 17, 2017 at 4:36 am
Yep, Grace. grief. In all it’s distorted ‘life’. thanks, Grace.
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February 17, 2017 at 4:36 am
Hi Georgeplace….I think this is universal. Thank you for your reading and your comment.
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February 17, 2017 at 4:37 am
Oh! that fits! I wasn’t sure what it was, Toni….but decided to throw it in the ring. Thank you so much for reading and your comment.
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February 17, 2017 at 5:24 am
The description of the pale flesh and veins, the two parts juxtaposed against each other create this harrowing sadness,,
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February 17, 2017 at 9:07 am
Death is like that, ice cold and permanent. An ending for one, a beginning for another, but both without issue.
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February 17, 2017 at 10:23 am
Hi Jane. That’s exactly it. Thank you, Jane for reading and your insightful comment.
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February 17, 2017 at 10:24 am
Hi Bjorn. Harrowing is an excellent word. Thank you for reading and your comment.
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February 17, 2017 at 11:10 am
My pleasure 🙂
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February 17, 2017 at 4:41 pm
The prompt be hanged.
This is so real and moving, delicate then really hard and cutting. I’m going to bookmark this to read again later
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February 17, 2017 at 10:51 pm
LOL! That’s my sentiment about most prompts….but it’s usually the shock of the new. LOL! Than you so much. It is a dip into grief…as much as I can.
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February 18, 2017 at 8:18 pm
I also wrote about loss for this. Someone always loses when death rears it’s ugly head.
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February 18, 2017 at 11:03 pm
Thank you, Bekkie. I’ll come read. I am going off these groups because my own life has become more complicated…so I will disappear for a while..but not frm my blog. I’m at the end stages of a novel and I need the concentration of energies. Thank you so much for reading and your supportive comments.
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February 20, 2017 at 7:22 pm
You’re welcome! Good luck with your novel! I need to work on my first book of poetry I keep saying I’m going to do it but I’ve put it off. I hope you find happiness whatever you find! Hugs!
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February 20, 2017 at 8:50 pm
Thank you, Bekkie….and hugs back!
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